CLEOPATRA'S MUMMY ON CHATBOTS: BARD, GPT, BING
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DEATH IS ONLY THE BEGINNING - The epic blockbuster, 1963 film starring Elizabeth Taylor, by 20th Century Fox. We take over the story, where the Egyptian Pharaoh Queen, Isis, left off. As told by Cecil B de Mille, among others. Cleopatra's suicide pact with Mark Antony is one of the most tragic and dramatic episodes in ancient history - one of the greatest love stories ever recorded; a true tale about the most famous woman in history. The two lovers, who had defied the might of Rome and ruled Egypt together, decided to end their lives rather than face capture and humiliation by their enemy, Augustus (Octavian). |
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[FINAL] DRAFT (PROFESSIONAL) FEEDBACK: The
script is really ambitious with its different concepts crisscrossing
with each other
- giving us different flavors of historical, sci-fi
and spy films all wrapped into one story. Futuristic concepts like the
Elizabeth Swann and the A.I.
Hal give off
Treasure Planet
vibes with Storm and his pioneering adventure mindset behind the helm.
In addition to this,
it's really interesting to see Cleopatra as a
character in the present day, and seeing how she would react/behave.
How would you rate 'Cleopatra's Mummy' screenplay featuring a cloned Egyptian queen?
- What are the challenges of cloning a human being? What are the ethical implications of doing so?
- How does the cloned queen adapt to the modern world? What does she think of the changes that have taken place in Egypt since she died?
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What
kind of conflict does the cloned queen face? Is she threatened by other
people who want to use her for their own purposes? Or does she face
internal conflict as she tries to reconcile her ancient past with her
modern present?
- Put the cloned queen in danger. Perhaps she is hunted by a group of people who want to kill her or to exploit her powers. This would create suspense and excitement in the story.
-
Force
the cloned queen to make difficult choices. Perhaps she has to choose
between her own happiness and the good of Egypt. This would add drama
and complexity to the story.
CHATBOT ASSESSMENTS
Microsoft's Bing appears to be of the opinion that it may not be possible to clone Cleopatra, since nobody has found her mummy [fair comment. But what happens when, or if, they do?]. Also raising a number of technical difficulties to be overcome in the cloning process, such as uploading memories, and (brain) conditioning (see Boys from Brazil), such that she might think and behave like the famous Pharaoh queen. Yet, DNA from mammoths millions of years old has been extracted, proving that a well preserved specimen might yield good results. And we know that brain interfaces (BCIs) are advancing in technology, that communicate directly with the human brain. We wonder then if the AI chatbox has read the script! We will keep tabs on that one. Since, Bard has not read the script either, but gives more positive advice, to help us develop the script into a masterpiece.
BING:
How would you rate the Cleopatra The Mummy screenplay?
- How Cleopatra manages to survive for thousands of years without aging [she is explicitly preserved to survive thousands of years, somewhat like being mummified, only far better];
- How the Mummy can control the weather and the animals [the mummy does not control the weather or animals - that is The Mummy, starring Brendan Fraser and Arnold Vosloo], and
- How the protagonists can escape from various traps and dangers without any explanation [What traps, the only danger is being attacked by a missile, and there is an explanation for that?].
The
screenplay also has some clichés, stereotypes and tropes that are
overused and predictable, such as the romantic subplot between Cleopatra
and the archaeologist, the comic relief
sidekick [?], and the final showdown between the Mummy and the
heroes [there is no showdown, since
the mummy is inanimate]. The screenplay also
has some scenes that are too violent, graphic or inappropriate for a
general audience, such as the Mummy's resurrection, Cleopatra's torture
and execution, and the sexual innuendos.
[The mummy is not resurrected and
there is no torture or execution. Cleopatra takes her own
life.]
- As to the Mummy's ability to control the weather and the animals? Was it a curse or a blessing? If so, who gave it to him and why? How did he learn to use it and what were its limitations? [There is no antagonist mummy in this story]
- As to escaping dangers without any explanation? For instance, how did they survive the sandstorm, the snake pit, the booby-trapped tomb and the army of mummies? [There is no sandstorm, snake pit, or army of mummies in this story]
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Did they have any skills or equipment that helped
them? If so, where did they get them and how did they use them?
- Avoid using clichés that are common in this genre. For instance, create a more original and realistic relationship between Cleopatra and the archaeologist [nobody has thought of re-uniting Cleopatra and a descendant of Mark Antony before in the 21st century], give more depth and personality to the comic relief sidekick, and make the final showdown between the Mummy and the heroes more surprising and exciting [The mummy does not come into it, being an inanimate DNA donor - confused source error?].
- Adjust the tone and style of the screenplay to suit the intended audience and genre. For instance, reduce the amount of violence, gore and sexual content [There is very limited sexual content, and no gore] to make it more suitable for a general audience, or increase it to make it more appealing for a horror fan base. Also, balance the humor and seriousness of the story to make it more consistent and coherent.
In light of the above, we would have to rate Bing down a little for the sheer number of inaccuracies, introducing serious confusion to any reader. Though, this is a learning experience/experiment for all of us to benefit from, including the Bing chatbot. It appears Bing is providing more general advice to script writers, than observations tailored to this particular draft V1. Also, mixing this screenplay with the plots of other films in the same genre.
We
are of course, more than willing to make appropriate changes
to improve the script. As Bing says, a script needs to be
written for the target audience. And that is why we have
planned out two additional screenplays, one for
a more conservative audience, removing the Nazi element,
and one for those who would like to see some traditional
monster fun in a different way.
How would you rate 'Cleopatra's Mummy' screenplay featuring a cloned Egyptian queen?
- An original and engaging concept
- Well-developed and believable characters
- Sharp and witty dialogue
- A well-paced and suspenseful plot
- Interesting and meaningful themes
- Overall good execution
However, the screenplay also has a few weaknesses, such as:
- The concept is similar to other films, such as "Cleopatra" and "The Mummy." [Which ones!]
- The plot is somewhat predictable.
- The ending is a bit rushed.
Overall, I think the "Cleopatra's Mummy" screenplay is a good read, and it has the potential to be a good movie. However, it would need some work to make it truly great.
Here are some specific suggestions for improvement:
- The screenplay could explore the concept of cloning in more depth. What are the ethical implications of cloning?
- What are the potential consequences of cloning a powerful Egyptian queen?
- The screenplay could develop the plot more slowly. This would allow the audience to become more invested in the characters and the story.
- The screenplay could have a more satisfying ending. The current ending is a bit rushed, and it doesn't really resolve all of the loose ends.
I hope this feedback is helpful.
ABOUT BARD & BING
ChatGPT and Bard
are both chatbots powered by artificial intelligence. On the surface,
they are pretty similar and can perform many of the same tasks. But each
AI algorithm has its own strengths and weaknesses.
How would you rate 'Cleopatra's Mummy' screenplay featuring a cloned Egyptian queen?
- A well-developed protagonist: The cloned queen would need to be a complex and relatable character. She would need to have her own unique goals and motivations.
- A compelling story: The story would need to be exciting and suspenseful. It would also need to explore the themes of cloning, identity, and what it means to be human.
- Strong supporting characters: The cloned queen would need to be surrounded by a cast of well-developed supporting characters. These characters would need to help her grow and change over the course of the story.
- Visually stunning visuals: The film would need to be visually stunning. The sets, costumes, and special effects would need to transport audiences to ancient Egypt.
If a screenplay about a cloned Egyptian queen can do all of these things, then I think it has the potential to be a truly great film.
Here are some additional thoughts on how the screenplay could explore the implications of cloning and what it means to be human:
- The screenplay could explore the question of whether or not the cloned queen is a real person. Does she have her own unique soul and consciousness? Or is she simply a copy of Cleopatra?
- The screenplay could also explore the relationship between the cloned queen and the people who created her. Do they see her as a daughter, a sister, or simply a tool?
- The screenplay could also explore the question of how the cloned queen would fit into the modern world. Would she be able to adapt to modern society? Or would she always feel like an outsider?
I think these are all important questions that a screenplay about a cloned Egyptian queen would need to address.
POPULAR MECHANICS - 3 FEBRUARY 2023 - CHATGPT IS A 'VERY SOPHISTICATED GUESSING ENGINE' THAT PROBABLY WON'T STEAL YOUR JOB
WHAT
EXACTLY IS CHAT GPT?
HOW
DOES CHAT GPT WORK?
WHAT'S
NEXT FOR CHAT GPT?
ChatGPT
recently became free to use, which is great. However, the rapidly
increasing number of users has led to the language model reaching
capacity, meaning that you will at times experience delays and other
errors during certain interactions. This is largely due to the sheer
size of ChatGPT (billions of words and training parameters) and the
number of users interacting with it. Amazing that it can spit out an
answer for you in mere seconds, right? https://www.popularmechanics.com/technology/a42733497/how-does-chatgpt-work/ https://www.popularmechanics.com/technology/a42733497/how-does-chatgpt-work/
https://bard.google.com/
THONIS-HERACLEION was Egypt’s greatest port for much of the first millennium B.C. before Alexander the Great established Alexandria in 331 B.C. Then around 365 A.D. both cities vanished beneath the Mediterranean sea, hiding the location of Queen Cleopatra's tomb - confounding archaeologists - until now.
REINCARNATION - Using the latest technology in super-computer genome mapping and digital DNA splicing, a group of scientists looking for the cure for cancer reincarnate Cleopatra VII, John Storm having found and recovered her sarcophagus from its watery tomb. The resurrected Queen has to mesh with the modern world she's been reborn into. But the CIA plot to steal the technology that brought the reborn Pharaoh back to life, to advance their military capabilities. Neither had reckoned on John Storm and his crew.
Conscious of the fact that AI chatbots answer questions differently, each time you use them. It is important to get a spread of responses. We noticed that some are inaccurate in detail, while others are spot on. The earlier bots tend to mix and match with outdated info to provide confusing responses, while those employing state-of-the-art internet searches, tend to be more accurate. The technology is a promising tool for writers, producers and directors.
We hope to get 'Cleopatra The Mummy' - or - one of the alternative adaptations into print by 2024. To be available on Amazon and at other good bookstores, including libraries and schools. And, not written by robots, but for sure using search engines to research subject matter, and asking chatbots what they think. Even if only to see what they might say on any particular subject. Similarly, we are sure, many people will be giving it a go!
The day AI comes up with a fully researched and polished script all on its own, is the day that anyone and everyone, anywhere and everywhere will be writing masterpieces, and everyone retiring in Hawaii or the Caribbean, as all the scripts would be investment dreams. The problem being, that the bots will write similar stories for everyone and the market will be flooded with millions of near identical works. Nothing original or new. But that is crazy. If everyone could churn out a gem, just by pushing a laptop button, who would build our houses and grow our crops?
And, who would own the copyright and trademarks, if any? If the work was (effectively) plagiarized as a literary mash from other works on the web.
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